Abuse enjambement


I walked along an empty beach
just as the autumn sun was reach-
ing the height of its ascent
and that tableaux became cement-
ed in my mind and in my mem-
ory that day in late Septem-
ber. I stood and watched for min-
utes the pale and glimmerin-
g face of that great child of heav-
en glide across the sky so lev-
el.

11 comments:

  1. Too silly even for Stickly
    come dancing...

    :-)

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  2. I love how you even break up syllables (glimmerin-g)
    More abusage of poetic techniques, please. I can't get enough of them

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  3. actually if you string it all out into two sensible lines, the passage itself is quite nice! <3

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  4. ...and in the spirit of
    `i married an axe
    murderer`...
    I was lov
    ed!

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  5. Except for the glimmerin/g line, because it abandons the iambic rhythm of every other line, I actually quite like it... I think it takes the overuse of enjambment far enough to come back around to be rather funny light verse.

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  6. Wait, Joel - that's not enjambment. Well, it is, but so would
    this be.
    You don't have to
    split the word, only
    the clause.

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  7. He did that too, Jon.

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